Time to wax romantic lyrical

[CptKipling]

Ok, in 20 words, what are peoples ideas for a message for a valentines gift to be delivered on the day.

I have an idea, a good one i think, but I thought some added inspiration would help.

So come on, hit me!

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Roses are red
pansies are purple
Wanna do the nasty?

[CptKipling]

lol

Maybe SLIGHTLY more subtle!

Bearing in mind also that other people might see it, say........ HER MUM! /ubbthreads/images/icons/blush.gif

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[CptKipling]

To give a better idea, I\'m looking more for gracefull eloquence on the note (maybe a touch of humour), but I got her a funny card (kinda like your effort FTR!) so I dont wana over do it.

[Sexyredhead]

This is not original, also not necessarily poetry, but I got it on a Valentine\'s card a few years back, and it stuck with me. I loved it.

\"To know me is to love me. To have sex with me is to worship me for all eternity.\"

It wasn\'t necessarily eternity, but I worshipped him for a good long while. /ubbthreads/images/icons/wink.gif

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I like that. /ubbthreads/images/icons/laugh.gif

[seadove]

Jack and Jill went up the hill
To fetch a pale of water
G-d knows what they did up there
But they came back with a daughter.

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[CptKipling]

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lol

[CptKipling]

Hurry hurry hurry!

C\'mon, be creative!

Think Shakespear, or something...

[Sexyredhead]

Well, if you\'re thinking Shakespeare, one of my faves is sonnet #57, but it\'s lots longer than 20 words, and I don\'t know how serious you are about this girl. I also love #46.
Ahh, here\'s a good one, from #29:
\"Haply I think on thee, and then my state,
Like to the lark at break of day arising
From sullen earth, sings hymns at heaven\'s gate;
For thy sweet love remembered such wealth brings
That then I scorn to change my state with kings.\"

Again, more than 20 words, but effective. /ubbthreads/images/icons/smile.gif

Another line I remember, but not the play:
\"I am afeared, being in night,
all this is but a dream,
too flattering sweet to be substantiated.\"

And last but not least, from Romeo and Juliet:
\"Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs;
Being purged, a fire sparkling in lovers\' eyes;
Being vexed, a sea nourished with lovers\' tears;
What is it else? A madness most discreet,
A choking gall, and a preserving sweet.\"

That\'s all the sappiness that can be dragged out of me for the day. Hope it helps a bit.

[CptKipling]

You\'re a gem, Sexyredhead!

I wasnt thinking totally serious, but this kind of thing, but with comedy undertones.

[CptKipling]

Ok I think I got it! All on my little own!

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To mine, fairest Valentine,
Melting into stellar eyes,
I send here, my love resigned,
Unto yours, who is simply divine!
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/ubbthreads/images/icons/laugh.gif I think she\'ll understand! Does it look as if its meant to be a little tongue in cheak? Kinda so over the top its funny? No, just crap? Oh well, I\'m going for this one anyway.

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Why does it have to be funny?

[Sexyredhead]

I think he wants it to be a little funny so he\'s got an \"out\" if she doesn\'t like it.

[CptKipling]

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You think so poorly of me!

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Nuh-uh. Come clean, now. That\'s my suspicion too. If you\'re going to all the trouble of this valentine gift and poem, shoot, go for broke and sweep her off her feet, why not?

Any rate ...
http://www.poemsforfree.com/valpo.html (\"http://www.poemsforfree.com/valpo.html\")

[CptKipling]

I only have 20 words to write something, which is pretty hard! I wanted something meaningfull (that message has a hidden meaning that I wont go into), but I like to have something funny aswell, is that so hard to believe?

Besides, something which will make her smile, and then maybe a twinkle of laughter cant be a bad thing.

She\'s told me that she is worried that I will spend too much/put too much effort in, which I haven\'t and don\'t plan to. That messages is as serious as I think appropriate, while still remaining slightly playfull.

[Sexyredhead]

Why the 20-word limit?

[Lucky]

< \"To know me is to love me. To have sex with me is to worship me for all eternity.\" >

That\'s the Valentine (person) I want.

[CptKipling]

Because its with a package that gets sent to her house.

\"Price includes delivery and gift box with your own personal message!\"

Like that, Royal Mail trying to skimp on printer ink!

[Sexyredhead]

What are you sending her?

[Elana]

<<To mine, fairest Valentine,
Melting into stellar eyes,
I send here, my love resigned,
Unto yours, who is simply divine!>>

Go for it! /ubbthreads/images/icons/smile.gif

[CptKipling]

A single rose.

Thanks Elana!

[Sexyredhead]

How about:
I have failed. No mere rose could do you justice. Accept this humble offering and go out with me anyway?

[Bruce]

There once was a young man from Nantucket
Whose...

No, wait a minute. That probably wouldn\'t work very well.
Never mind...
Bruce

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Bruce, you funny. /ubbthreads/images/icons/laugh.gif

[Bruce]

Have you heard that one?

How do you like your new title? I figured you\'d spent enough time in recovery. /ubbthreads/images/icons/smile.gif

Bruce

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I like my new title very much and I thank you for it.

I vaguely remember that limerick. Something that rhymes with \"bucket\" was soon to come along, had you proceeded, I believe. /ubbthreads/images/icons/laugh.gif

[Bruce]

Lots of fun new titles coming up for you! Moot point for us mere mortals. :-)

More hints on the lymeric:

There once was a young man from Nantucket
Whose .... was so long he could ....
He said with a grin as he wiped off his chin
If my ear were a .... I would ....

Bruce

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You have a street address for this guy at all?

[Bruce]

Well, he lives in Nantucket. Just ask around. Hard to keep a guy like that a secret, I would think.

Bruce

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[Sexyredhead]

Who cares about a street address. I\'d be happy with a 20-block radius on places he\'s been known to hang out. I\'d be happy to hunt for him. /ubbthreads/images/icons/smile.gif